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Beta Reader Needed for Epic Fantasy Novel

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Zodiark

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Edit: I took Deleyanlee's advice and have posted my first chapter in the SYW if you want an idea of what it is like:

http://absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?p=4831331#post4831331

Edit: Here is a link to my current query if you'd rather read that instead and then decide if you want to read it:

http://absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=176185

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Edit: The word count may be a bit intimidating, so if you would like me to start you off with the first chapter or two, I would gladly comply =] I want to knock down the word count a bit more, so that's part of the reason I would like a Beta reader.


Hi, I have written and revised my epic fantasy novel "Ego Duelist" several times, but I need a second party to look at it. It is at 128,000-ish words and I have been told by several people here to have Beta readers read it. Like many here, I really really want to land an agent and get published, so I am doing whatever I can to achieve this dream. I would appreciate it if someone with time and experience would help me with my novel (I believe this is called a mentor. I'm new to this, so I'm not very sure).

I would like helpful criticism (not sugar-coated, but not "RAWR NEVER WRITE AGAIN!!") If you are interested or have any questions, please let me know! Thank you for your interest!
 
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I could give the first chapter a go, if you want, if we get along well and I feel I have something worthwhile to say I'd love to keep reading chapter by chapter.

I'm definitely not the best guy around when it comes to writing, but I do my best and I'd do the same when helping you.

Send me a PM and I'll give you my email adress.
 
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Hello,

Just my two cents: rewrite your query a little bit. I have no idea what's it about except for a swordfighting alter ego that has to save her brother. The query does not immediately speak to me cause I don't see the larger picture.

Maybe it's just me, but these points are unclear :

Her brother has left her to join the organization running the tournament, but Diana will take him back. Take him (who? her brother?) back where?

Deadly sword fight tournament That she is organizing?

She will win with blind luck does not sound so appealing. It reeks of too much coincidence.

What is the connection between the brother and the tournament?
(It feels random at this moment)


I hope this helps somehow,
regards
 
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I'll take a look at it, Zodiark. I'll rep you my email address. :)
 
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You might consider posting the first chapter in SYW (along with the request for a beta for the entire book) so people can really see what they're getting into, if they like it and if they think they can help you. Then edit your first post and include a link to the chapter.
 
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