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How effective do you find the sort of writing that goes along the lines of "What he didn't yet know . . ."?
By this I mean when the author is writing in proper narrative and is following the same time-line throughout, but suddenly cuts in with little snippets of the future-to-come that is, as of yet, unknown to the MC.
In 1st person POV I've seen it in terms of "That was the last time I saw my daughter alive" or "If only Jack had the good senses to reveal his secret to me then while I was still neck-deep in the investigation. It would be another month before I found out." (Sorry, I can't remember where these are from. I think the first one is Stephen King, but I'm having trouble remembering the author of the second one.)
These work fairly well in 1st person as it builds an excitement or anticipation for something to come. But have you found that it works equally well in 3rd Omni?
"He dismissed the obscure lithographs as the musings of a madman. Their intoxicating portrayals of life lived in agony would not be recognizable to him until after his final encounter with the Devil."
I realize it all depends on the story, but if in the above scenario we aren't even supposed to be aware that "he" is about to meet the Devil, would that feel like giving away too much prematurely?
By this I mean when the author is writing in proper narrative and is following the same time-line throughout, but suddenly cuts in with little snippets of the future-to-come that is, as of yet, unknown to the MC.
In 1st person POV I've seen it in terms of "That was the last time I saw my daughter alive" or "If only Jack had the good senses to reveal his secret to me then while I was still neck-deep in the investigation. It would be another month before I found out." (Sorry, I can't remember where these are from. I think the first one is Stephen King, but I'm having trouble remembering the author of the second one.)
These work fairly well in 1st person as it builds an excitement or anticipation for something to come. But have you found that it works equally well in 3rd Omni?
"He dismissed the obscure lithographs as the musings of a madman. Their intoxicating portrayals of life lived in agony would not be recognizable to him until after his final encounter with the Devil."
I realize it all depends on the story, but if in the above scenario we aren't even supposed to be aware that "he" is about to meet the Devil, would that feel like giving away too much prematurely?