Sci-Fi Prologue, Prequel, or just start?

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I am writing a sci-fi novel. I was planning on the prolouge being the history of how the humans fled to their new planet. But it is really long and pretty boring, should I just make the whole history a prequel? Should I keep with the LONG BORING prolouge? Or should I just start and do something like this:

The alien race of the Litswas, invaded Earth on January 2nd, 2098 A.D. The human race was enslaved by the Litswas till the year 2102, when the scientist, Letherro, finished his invention, the Xanisz, which took the people of Earth to the planet Coltu, or Planet of the Seas.

-History of Coltu By: Maxxam Jenkins

Jake awoke to his beeping of his ancient iPod touch alarm. He quickly grabbed the mechanical device and switched it off. He sat up in his bed and looked around at his messy room. He rubbed his eyes and stood up, stretching.

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Just start the story where the story starts. If the history is important, explain it throughout your story, in brief and relevant bursts.

Infodumps are your enemy.
 
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I am writing a sci-fi novel. I was planning on the prolouge being the history of how the humans fled to their new planet. But it is really long and pretty boring, should I just make the whole history a prequel? Should I keep with the LONG BORING prolouge? Or should I just start and do something like this:



What would be better???? I need help urgently.

See those two words in all caps. Nobody wants to read something that even the author describes as "long and boring".

It doesn't matter yet why people are on Litswas, so there's no reason to explain.
 

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I wouldn't even start off with that two-sentence infodump. They're just a bunch of proper nouns about which I know nothing (and don't have any reason to care about them, either). And how do you pronounce Xanisz. As someone whose native language is English, I could guess at it (something like ZAN-is) and I don't know of any words that end in a sz. As they make similar sounds (in English, at any rate), it seems a little redundant.

Start with the story. I don't buy fiction to read fictional histories that (no offense intended, as I've not read yours) are often tedious, badly written, and implausible. I want a story that has characters I can relate to in situations I care about, and if it's important that we know who the Litswas are, you can tell me later. (also, 2098 to 2102 is only four years...enslaved sounds a heavy word to use). If the Litswas are just there to get the humans off Earth and we never hear from them again, I don't actually ever need to know their names.
 

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I wouldn't even start off with that two-sentence infodump. They're just a bunch of proper nouns about which I know nothing (and don't have any reason to care about them, either). And how do you pronounce Xanisz. As someone whose native language is English, I could guess at it (something like ZAN-is) and I don't know of any words that end in a sz. As they make similar sounds (in English, at any rate), it seems a little redundant.

The port city of Szczecin, Poland is pronounced "shchechin". :)
 

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As indicated by Liosse, you shouldn't keep "long, boring" anything.

As for Prologues, you'll get lots of variant opinions here (check the Novels forum, in particular), but whether or not you choose to have one, I'd strongly suggest that it not be the first thing you write. In fact, I'd suggest that it be about the last thing you write. Write your story, from where the story actually starts, and if, when it's completed or nearly so, you see a need for some Prologuy thing, you'll write a better one.

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I skip every prolog I encounter.

Once, I started reading a fantasy novel that had a prelude, so I skipped it. Then I ran into a prolog, which I also skipped. Mindboggling. The story made just as much sense starting on page 22 as it would have at page 1.
 

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I have no objection whatsoever to loan-words, I just felt that in this instance, knowing nothing more than these couple of sentences from the OP, that it was a smushing together of slightly off letters/syllables to make something sound exotic.
 

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Sometimes, prologues work. But most often, as has been mentioned above, they are just superfluous.

Start your story, as Liosse and blacbird suggest, where the story starts. Right in the middle of some exciting action where the main character is in peril. Then get him/her out of peril, and then, if you have time along the way, shoe-horn in some tidbits about history. But only do that when the information thus imparted is something the reader needs to know.
 

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I agree with everyone else. I tend to like prologues, but not ones that are history/info dumps. And, as everyone else mentioned, you should definitely avoid anything that you could describe as "long and boring". However, I disagree that you need to impart the history within the flow of the narrative. Sometimes, that can backfire. I've read novels where I'm totally lost, and a quick info dump would save time and keep me from being totally confused. It depends on how your story develops, I think.

Is there a good way for you to introduce the history in the narrative? Otherwise, if you really feel strongly about it, plenty of authors have done that two-three word info dump at the beginning to just set the stage. I know it's frowned upon, but I see it all the time and it works. So the way you presented the information (in that quick blurb from a fictional history book from your universe) is, I think, an acceptable way of sharing the information.
 

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I agree. Prologues are unnecessary and can be a bad hint to what sort of story it's going to be. I want to know what's happening now. :)
 

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Prologues can work but even then, they are seldom needed (and this from someone whose 2nd book opens with a prologue). Whistlelock's advice is dead on.
 

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I agree with the consensus here. In SF/fantasy particularly, the reader is going to be plunged into a world where things aren't the same as this one. If it's an actual alternate world (other planet, future society, magical kingdom, changed history) there will be the experience of being plunked down in a foreign land where (somehow) one knows the language but otherwise have no clue what it's about, but also have limited access to at least some people's heads who do know what it's about. Understanding the world should, IMO, be like putting a puzzle together. Too much up front spoils that experience. At the same time, delivering comprehension too slowly creates ongoing confusion.

One thing that I sometimes do is write a prologue or backstory with no intention of publishing it as part of the book. That way, I have all the facts down for myself. (Because really, one often starts a story with only a rather vague concept of what the world is like in which it takes place. Or at least I do.) In writing this ugly beast, I often stimulate myself to plot ideas or new characters. Some of it may occasionally be good enough to chop up and insert at appropriate points in the story, but do this sparingly. The problem with info dumps is not just that they're long and boring (though that's often true as well), but that they break immersion and remind the reader that he's a foreigner.
 

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You could always leave it a bit of a mystery.


I originally had a prologue describing a similar situation, but the prologue itself was a "short story" entirely separate, although with great paralells to the rest of the story.
 

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Take a cue from Bart Simpson: Start at the start, and then take it away.
 

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I like that sort of prologue.

Especially if there are several of those quotes throughout the book that are relevant and well placed - book parts or chapter breaks etc.
 
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