question about POV

bkwriter · Dec 21, 2009

I'm not sure if this is the right thread or if it's syw but I just have a limted third pov question?

Lisa felt the warmth of the room drop. Joe sat on the couch. Lisa crossed her arms and gave a curious look.

Is this right? or should it be something more?

thanks.

Matera the Mad · Dec 21, 2009

"him" seems to be missing, but otherwise it looks healthy.

David Wisehart · Dec 22, 2009

"...gave him a curious look" should be fine. We're in Lisa's POV, and she can intend (or know) she's giving a curious look.

On the other hand, in Lisa's POV you would not of course write, "Lisa looked curious."

bkwriter · Dec 22, 2009

thank you very much. And happy hollidays to you

question about POV

bkwriter

Matera the Mad

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David Wisehart

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