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Soo...
My novel, which I am finally resolving to finish (mostly 'cos I want to pay for college myself and I'm thinking an advance isn't a bad way to go)...
But I think there may be two audiences.
And I'm not sure who I should pitch to.
Here's a rough synopsis: (putting it in white to discourrage t3h spammerz)
The novel begins in the year 2025, with the introduction of a new
government that promises to protect children, called Project Hai-Zi. It
originally begins in America, with the initiative growing. It is accepted
unanimously in Asia, not so much in Europe. This leads to animosity
between the two continents. However, a French family named Delacroix
joins Hai-Zi and moves to America. Renee Delacroix grows and endures
three years of training, starting at age 10. At around 13, she is
inducted into Roger Eltrain's assassin squad, which is somewhat
reminiscent of janissaries. Roger Eltrain is the new (I haven't thought
of his title yet, not using President. Thinking about using Prime
Minister) leader of America, after working his way up the ladder for over
thirty years. He takes charge of Renee and uses her to do his bidding.
To ensure her total compliance, however, he erases all of her old life.
This includes orchestrating a domestic attack directed at his base,
resulting in the deaths of her mother and father. This attack is covered
up and excused as a terrorist act, and political prisoners are executed in
reprisal.
Four years later, we are introduced to Jessie Sandber and her family.
Jessie is a Hai-Zi soldier, now serving her third year of service at the
age of eighteen. Jessie is married to Steve Sandber, who maintains an
almost aggressive stance against Hai-Zi. The two are in Poland, in the
process of adopting their infant niece. The young girl's parents are
Jessie's sister, and a man who is violently against Hai-Zi, and may have
been involved in the Dallas attacks and escaped punishment. Jessie,
believing what she has been told, murders him in cold blood while in
interrogation.
Fourteen years after that, we get a glimpse of Jessie's niece. She is
Sydney Lipsky (NOTE: This wasn't supposed to be her original name. I gave
her that name as a placeholder until I found something better. It
stuck.), recognized and accredited genius. Syd has spent her days, when
not in school, as a con artist and smuggler. The first time we see her,
we see that she is hooking up a car battery to an electric fence at
Hai-Zi's main base in Washington D.C. She climbs the fence and sneaks
into one of the barracks, providing them with contraband items.
So yeah, if someone could kindly help, that would be awesome.
My novel, which I am finally resolving to finish (mostly 'cos I want to pay for college myself and I'm thinking an advance isn't a bad way to go)...
But I think there may be two audiences.
And I'm not sure who I should pitch to.
Here's a rough synopsis: (putting it in white to discourrage t3h spammerz)
The novel begins in the year 2025, with the introduction of a new
government that promises to protect children, called Project Hai-Zi. It
originally begins in America, with the initiative growing. It is accepted
unanimously in Asia, not so much in Europe. This leads to animosity
between the two continents. However, a French family named Delacroix
joins Hai-Zi and moves to America. Renee Delacroix grows and endures
three years of training, starting at age 10. At around 13, she is
inducted into Roger Eltrain's assassin squad, which is somewhat
reminiscent of janissaries. Roger Eltrain is the new (I haven't thought
of his title yet, not using President. Thinking about using Prime
Minister) leader of America, after working his way up the ladder for over
thirty years. He takes charge of Renee and uses her to do his bidding.
To ensure her total compliance, however, he erases all of her old life.
This includes orchestrating a domestic attack directed at his base,
resulting in the deaths of her mother and father. This attack is covered
up and excused as a terrorist act, and political prisoners are executed in
reprisal.
Four years later, we are introduced to Jessie Sandber and her family.
Jessie is a Hai-Zi soldier, now serving her third year of service at the
age of eighteen. Jessie is married to Steve Sandber, who maintains an
almost aggressive stance against Hai-Zi. The two are in Poland, in the
process of adopting their infant niece. The young girl's parents are
Jessie's sister, and a man who is violently against Hai-Zi, and may have
been involved in the Dallas attacks and escaped punishment. Jessie,
believing what she has been told, murders him in cold blood while in
interrogation.
Fourteen years after that, we get a glimpse of Jessie's niece. She is
Sydney Lipsky (NOTE: This wasn't supposed to be her original name. I gave
her that name as a placeholder until I found something better. It
stuck.), recognized and accredited genius. Syd has spent her days, when
not in school, as a con artist and smuggler. The first time we see her,
we see that she is hooking up a car battery to an electric fence at
Hai-Zi's main base in Washington D.C. She climbs the fence and sneaks
into one of the barracks, providing them with contraband items.
So yeah, if someone could kindly help, that would be awesome.
