Is this passive sentace OK?

mware01 said:

My dad was even quoted in the article, "I'm praying for the safe return...

I think it's OK, because it's not a big deal that there's a quote in the paper, but it's a huge deal that's it's my MC's dad?

Am I right?
It would be easy to fix, but then I think it looses it's focus.

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You're right.

mware01 said:

My dad was even quoted in the article, "I'm praying for the safe return...

I think it's OK, because it's not a big deal that there's a quote in the paper, but it's a huge deal that's it's my MC's dad?

Am I right?
It would be easy to fix, but then I think it looses it's focus.

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Only problem I see is with the sentence structure regarding the actual quote. Is the thing in quotations the name of the article? If not, you should have a full stop after the word "article" and before the quote.

My dad was even quoted in the article. "I'm praying for the safe return..."

or, if it's the title of the article:

My dad was even quoted in the article, "I'm Praying for the Safe Return..."

mware01 said:

My dad was even quoted in the article, "I'm praying for the safe return...

I think it's OK, because it's not a big deal that there's a quote in the paper, but it's a huge deal that's it's my MC's dad?

Am I right?
It would be easy to fix, but then I think it looses it's focus.

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There's nothing wrong with the passiveness of the sentence but there's something wrong with the grammar of it. The complete sentence needs a period, or you can say something more like this:

My dad was even quoted in the article, saying, "I'm praying for the safe return..."

Also, keep in mind that you're posting in the grammar forum of a writing site.

One of the situations in which a passive sentence construction is not only appropriate but desirable involves the focus of attention of the overall piece of writing. The example I always use is this:

"John Lennon was assassinated by Mark Chapman." If you're writing a piece about John Lennon, keeping the focus of attention on him, and not on Chapman, is desirable, and the passive sentence construction is likewise so.

On the other hand, if you're writing a piece about Mark Chapman, you'd want the active construction: "Mark Chapman assassinated John Lennon."

In the example you give, I think the passive construction is desirable, for the same reason.

caw