- Joined
- Mar 17, 2007
- Messages
- 1,473
- Reaction score
- 448
Looking for someone to read/critique the first three chapters of my urban fantasy WIP, WATCHERS. In exchange I'll read and critique the first three chapters of your story. I'm up for just about anything, though I'm most familiar with fantasy and science fiction. I'll do a line-by-line or just offer general comments, whichever you prefer. Summary below:
Twenty-two year old Kat Hanson has always had the feeling that she’s different, but she has no idea how different.
She doesn’t know that there’s a demon slumbering inside her body…or that the rogue scientist and sorcerer, Dr. Friendly, wants to capture her and use that demon to wipe out civilization and pave the way for a new human race—his own genetically altered, peaceful, obedient human race. She also doesn’t know that her childhood friend—shy, geeky Lane Rivers—is actually an undercover superhero sent to protect her from Dr. Friendly’s agents.
But she’s about to find out.
When Kat is attacked by two thugs with superhuman powers, Lane is forced to reveal his own powers to save her. Then he takes her to the secret headquarters of the Watchers—a superhero organization—where everything she ever thought she knew is turned upside down, and Kat must discover new strength within herself: the strength to harness and control the demon inside her before it awakens fully and consumes her mind.
If anyone's interested, PM me.
Twenty-two year old Kat Hanson has always had the feeling that she’s different, but she has no idea how different.
She doesn’t know that there’s a demon slumbering inside her body…or that the rogue scientist and sorcerer, Dr. Friendly, wants to capture her and use that demon to wipe out civilization and pave the way for a new human race—his own genetically altered, peaceful, obedient human race. She also doesn’t know that her childhood friend—shy, geeky Lane Rivers—is actually an undercover superhero sent to protect her from Dr. Friendly’s agents.
But she’s about to find out.
When Kat is attacked by two thugs with superhuman powers, Lane is forced to reveal his own powers to save her. Then he takes her to the secret headquarters of the Watchers—a superhero organization—where everything she ever thought she knew is turned upside down, and Kat must discover new strength within herself: the strength to harness and control the demon inside her before it awakens fully and consumes her mind.
If anyone's interested, PM me.