It seems, from reading several threads, that alliteration is generally viewed as a bad thing. However, is it OK to use alliteration when writing interior monologue - especially if your protagonist would likely use alliteration in his or her speech?
For example, suppose we have a character that the protagonist doesn't like: let's call the character Lawrence, from Liverpool, a 30-year-old bloke who's never had a girlfriend.
Lawrence strolls into a scene and the example line is:
"Here he comes, thought Jenny: Lawrence the Liverpool Loser."
Are there any problems with that?
For example, suppose we have a character that the protagonist doesn't like: let's call the character Lawrence, from Liverpool, a 30-year-old bloke who's never had a girlfriend.
Lawrence strolls into a scene and the example line is:
"Here he comes, thought Jenny: Lawrence the Liverpool Loser."
Are there any problems with that?
