Could I have your opinions on my writing? (:

[longlivelambert]

http://www.worthyofpublishing.com/chapter.asp?chapter_ID=13433
(: Please, can I have some constructive criticism?

[suki]

http://www.worthyofpublishing.com/chapter.asp?chapter_ID=13433
(: Please, can I have some constructive criticism?

First, welcome to AW. If you haven't been lurking around for a while, it can feel overwhelming. So, make sure you take a good look around.

But second, I note this is your first post. We are generally a helpful and friendly bunch (for the most part), but many are serious writers, seeking professional publication. So, critiques can be hard.

It helps to get your feet wet by reading the newbie guide and learning the lay of the land, especially so you can know what to expect from a critique and what is expected of you.

For instance, many of us don't follow outside links or invites to critique outside AW, and especially not someone we haven't gotten to know a bit. :}

So, if you want critique, I suggest you visit the Share Your Work Forum (the password is "Vista" when prompted) here:
http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/forumdisplay.php?s=&daysprune=&f=26

Start with the Main Share Your work forum, read the guidelines and newbie guide. Introduce yourself in the newbie forum.

Then, if you still want critique, post an appropriate section of what you want critiqued (short sections get more critique in my experience - 1,500 words or less) in the appropriate sub-forum in Share Your Work.

And make sure you check out some of the other posts seeking critique, and do your share.

Good luck.

~suki

[Mythical Tiger]

Welcome to AW longlivelambert. I'm going to go with Suki on this one. It would be great if you introduce yourself properly if you're planning on staying awhile. That way we'll all be more familiar with you and know a few things. Like what genre do you write in? How long have you been writing? What's your favorite color=}. Those sort of things. Good luck and happy writing! I hope to see you around!


~Sam

[BigWords]

Welcome to the Cooler longlivelambert.

I had a look at Cliche Much?, and on a quick read-through I couldn't find much to criticize. Post some of your work in SYW, as the others say. You can even re-post the chapter there (it isn't very long).

Good luck with your novel.

[scope]

What suki said.

[Matera the Mad]

:hi: Also, if you intend to get published, it's not a good idea to post your entire work openly on the Web. The AW crit forum is not open to the public, only AW members, so it is not considered a previoua publication.

Nice chapter.