Bored? His or her POV.

Hey if you're bored (because these are rough, long excerpts, and they are very similar) I just stuck two 1400-1500 word excerpts in the Erotical SYW forum.

I'm trying to decide whether to take this scene from his POV or hers. Anyway, if you're bored please pop over there - feel free to skim - and tell me which voice you like best, if you can read all around the grammar, redundant vocabulary, etc. probs?

(These are NOT exciting...it's essentially some dialog and a kiss - and the scenes are almost identical except for POV. As I said, if you're bored...lol)

If I do this right, the post should be at: http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?p=3336025

Thanks,

J.

rosemerry said:

When I read the title of thread I thought it was about bored sex or boring sex.

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rofl

Well, I just didn't want to send someone over to a 1500 word excerpt, plus a 1400 word excerpt that's the same thing, from a dfferent POV, when it's essentially just a hot kiss. Didn't wanna unfairly get anyone's hopes up and make 'em feel like they wasted their time.

ELMontague said:

Long Post has written quite the scene

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Thx.

J.