in search of a climax without cliche

lexxi

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In the mystery I'm working on, in that there is a murder, and there will probably later be another apparent murder attempt, but there are really no bad guys. The second near-death would actually turn out to be a suicide attempt by the person responsible for the first death, once he's feeling both guilty and likely to get caught.

I'm not so much worried about the reader feeling cheated that there was no evil murderer. As I see it, the book I'm writing is promising a mystery surrounding a violent death and eventually a solution to what really happened and why, hopefully with some interesting character interactions along the way as well as the puzzle.

What I am worried about is how to structure a climax without the usual cliches of evil murderer trying to protect his/her position by threatening the main character. I don't want to resort to the cozy cliche of gathering all the suspects in a room for the main character to explain and accuse either. I have some ideas of things that should happen at the end, but not a climactic scene.
 

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I could think of dozens, but I'd probably need some clues as to how well the ideas work for you along the way.

First a question, is there a "sleuth" main character looking for the murderer, or is it told as a story with the reader as a sort of virtual sleuth?
 

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Even though you don't have an 'evil villian' you still need an antagonist for your protagonist to pit their wits against.

In my novel I think readers will have a sympathy with my antagonist - his actions are justified; but that doesn't make him right.
 

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The main character is an amateur sleuth. Well, she never did that kind of thing before, but the events of this week inspire her to seek answers.

She may or may not interact much with the police. At least at the beginning she'll give them information that will narrow their investigation, but they would probably mostly be focusing on the forensics, and she'll be able to focus more on the interactions between the various characters, some seemingly insignificant little clues that she is able to put together in ways that the police wouldn't to point to a motive and an opportunity (i.e., breaking an apparent alibi).

She'll also discover some other interesting facts about her coworkers that might seem to point to reasons for others to have committed the murder but ultimately turn out to be unrelated.

She could figure out whodunit when and why before he attempts suicide and either realize that that is a risk and rush to prevent it or just happen on him immediately before, during, or immediately after the attempt. That would give more urgency to confronting the murderer, but it would rely too much on coincidence.

Or the suicide attempt could occur before she puts all the pieces together. It would look like an attempt at a second murder, which would mean looking in a different direction for the murderer and would appear to raise the stakes with the belief that there's someone going around making attempts on the lives of more than one person. But when the heroine figures out the events and motives surrounding the first death, then she'll also figure out that the same guy was also responsible for the second attack, that it was supposed to be suicide. And she could go confront him in the hospital. But that might be too anticlimactic.
 

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She could figure out whodunit when and why before he attempts suicide and either realize that that is a risk and rush to prevent it or just happen on him immediately before, during, or immediately after the attempt. That would give more urgency to confronting the murderer, but it would rely too much on coincidence.

Or the suicide attempt could occur before she puts all the pieces together. It would look like an attempt at a second murder, which would mean looking in a different direction for the murderer and would appear to raise the stakes with the belief that there's someone going around making attempts on the lives of more than one person. But when the heroine figures out the events and motives surrounding the first death, then she'll also figure out that the same guy was also responsible for the second attack, that it was supposed to be suicide. And she could go confront him in the hospital. But that might be too anticlimactic.
To me, the attempted suicide seems to fit better as the end of Act II (to use script terminology). This would be the lowest point of the story; the sleuth hasn't uncovered the murderer; worse, there's apparently an attempt at a second murder. A sort of "darkest before the dawn" event that both raises the stakes, and requires an all-out effort by the MC to solve the mystery.
 
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That's what I was thinking. But then I'm still missing a climax for Act III.
 

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Here's just an example of one . . . (might still be a bit of a cliche because I'm doing this quickly). By the way, I'm assuming the killer is somehow "out of it" after his suicide attempt.

The attempted suicide has occurred, but it looks like an attempted murder. The direction the amateur sleuth has been going appears to be the wrong one, and it looks like the sleuth has failed completely. The sleuth is almost at the brink of giving up, but something make her find the will to continue. The sleuth uses the "attempted murder" to follow a new lead. She does this, this, and this (I'll leave out the actual details) and comes full circle. Nothing makes sense until she realizes exactly what coming full circle means; that the pieces do fit . . . if one assumes one thing (which is not reveled to the reader just yet). The sleuth put together the pieces like they were pieces of a jigsaw puzzle, and then . . . takes her "case" to, say, the skeptical police and shows them step-by-step that the apparently victim is actually the killer, and that he is the only one who could be the killer. The police now see "the obvious". You could even have an epilogue type plot twist; after proving who the killer is, the sleuth and police go to confront the man . . . only to discovered that he has died in the meantime. They have the proof; but they will never get an admission now.

I hope that helps. I know that's a little clunky.
 
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