Logline & Title

JGactorNY · Dec 6, 2008

I have a Romantic Comedy titled:

Knock 3 Times

Logline: God tells a childless, unmarried professional she will be granted a baby if she can defeat the devil in the form of her handsome new business partner, in his evil worldly takeover.

Thanks for any constructive comments!
-Jeff in NYC

mario_c · Dec 7, 2008

Well, it's pretty strong as is. I would only vote to make the MC, the woman, front and center in the log. Thus:
An unmarried professional learns her handsome business partner is Satan made flesh.
I deliberately made this vague as to what happens next - that's up to you. The quest to have a baby, and God appearing to her, are details. Details don't go in the logline.

Bluegate · Dec 7, 2008

Hi Jeff. It sounded like a fun concept so I couldn't resit sticking my two cents in. Hope you don't mind the amateure attempt.

With her maternal clock ticking, a single professional is challenged by God. Defeat her handsome new business partner, who is actually the Devil and she will have the child of her dreams.

davemanfive · Dec 7, 2008

Knock three times

Hi there,
You have already done it your self. Good title and logline.
Get the screenplay up sounds interesting.
Will read first ten pages tommorrow, let me know where you post it.

Dave

Logline & Title

JGactorNY

mario_c

Your thoughts are not real...

Bluegate

Clearly has too much time on hand.

davemanfive