ok here goes. I have a WIP and wondering for some advice. the MC just met the villain. and she under estimated him. and ended getting hurt. the man that is interested in her has no idea. how should she tell him? She's very independent. but the man has been making himself part of her life. and the villian attacked her because of her because the man is in a fued with the villain ......
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This is one way to approach this ...
Look at WHY this attack is the hero's problem or the hero's responsibility or the hero's fault.
This is why the heroine comes to him instead of to the police,
or a lawyer,
or the local newspaper,
or the villain's bad-tempered wife,
or her cousin at the FBI,
or her knitting circle to grouse about.
If our gal is being stalked by the school librarian because the hero forgot to return 'Cry the Beloved Country' to the shelves in 1997,
then the heroine marches up to that scofflaw hero and says,
"Mr Needsum just tried to run me down with his Honda Civic. He was yelling 'Cry the Beloved Country' out the window. This has to stop. It's your fault. Fix it."
If this mess wasn't the hero's fault, our independent heroine wouldn't go to him for help.
She'd fix it herself or go to the police etc., herself.
So you locate what makes this the hero's problem.
Then you have your heroine walk in with
-- description of problem.
-- her extreme annoyance.
-- why it is the hero's fault.
That's the first thing she says to him.
She points out this little fault. Independent heroines don't mind pointing out the hero's little faults.
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If I read your question/scenario correctly, then I have to ask why does the man have to know about her involvement with the villain? It would seem a great way to build tension for her NOT to tell him. especially if she's independent, as you say. Hard to say without knowing where it is you plan to end up.
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