Hi Everyone,
I'm not sure if this is the right forum to post, so if not, pardon me.
Can I get some feedback on this query for a YA comedy I'm doing?
In an actual letter, I would put down why I chose that agent, although that part can be really hard, too.
Mostly, I'm worried that the summary part is too long.
Thanks!!
Dear Ms. Agent:
Alice knows she has the talent to be a stand-up comedian, but at fourteen, she's too young to even go to comedy clubs. Performing at the talent show and online, she wields her sense of humor to great effect, even though she often gets herself in some trouble with the school's alpha clique, the principal, even Finland.
To see real acts and learn comedy up close, Alice sneaks out at night to go to stand-up shows downtown using a fake ID, but eventually her parents catch her. Even when her grounding sentence is over, her age still hampers her career, but Alice manages to bypass that by winning a spot on a reality TV contest, So You Think You're Funny? If she wins, she'll get to sign with an agent and go on tour as the Mozart of stand-up comics. If not, well...she can take heart in having brought down the school's most obnoxious clique thanks to her humor and grit.
I would like to send you the manuscript of my young adult novel, So You Think You're Funny?, which is under 40,000 words. It takes place in the contemporary U.S.
I am a full-time freelance writer who has been published in several national magazines in the U.S. and Canada. Always a big fan of children's and young adult literature, I took a college course in the subject. I believe my recollection of my childhood and teenage years is better than that of most adults, leading to my interest in that readership. I'm also an amateur stand-up comedian, like my main character.
I am excited about the possibility of working with you. Thanks for reading my letter.
Yours,
Sarah Trachtenberg
I'm not sure if this is the right forum to post, so if not, pardon me.
Can I get some feedback on this query for a YA comedy I'm doing?
In an actual letter, I would put down why I chose that agent, although that part can be really hard, too.
Mostly, I'm worried that the summary part is too long.
Thanks!!
Dear Ms. Agent:
Alice knows she has the talent to be a stand-up comedian, but at fourteen, she's too young to even go to comedy clubs. Performing at the talent show and online, she wields her sense of humor to great effect, even though she often gets herself in some trouble with the school's alpha clique, the principal, even Finland.
To see real acts and learn comedy up close, Alice sneaks out at night to go to stand-up shows downtown using a fake ID, but eventually her parents catch her. Even when her grounding sentence is over, her age still hampers her career, but Alice manages to bypass that by winning a spot on a reality TV contest, So You Think You're Funny? If she wins, she'll get to sign with an agent and go on tour as the Mozart of stand-up comics. If not, well...she can take heart in having brought down the school's most obnoxious clique thanks to her humor and grit.
I would like to send you the manuscript of my young adult novel, So You Think You're Funny?, which is under 40,000 words. It takes place in the contemporary U.S.
I am a full-time freelance writer who has been published in several national magazines in the U.S. and Canada. Always a big fan of children's and young adult literature, I took a college course in the subject. I believe my recollection of my childhood and teenage years is better than that of most adults, leading to my interest in that readership. I'm also an amateur stand-up comedian, like my main character.
I am excited about the possibility of working with you. Thanks for reading my letter.
Yours,
Sarah Trachtenberg
