Posted Revised Erotic Scene - Need Crits

wise_dec4u · Sep 24, 2008

Based on the response I got a posted more revisions to my erotic (blow job) scene. It very emotional charged with a plot. I would like your opinions on whether this scene has the right balance of emotion and eroticism, is it realistic. Your constructive comments are greatly appreciated.

See link below:

http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=112525

ELMontague · Sep 24, 2008

Did I miss this in SYW? I saw the old one, but didn't see a new posting. Maybe I missed it.

Maryn · Sep 25, 2008

It's always smart, and courteous, to provide a link to the post you want to receive our attention, wise. If you're not sure how, I'd be glad to show you. I'm real low-tech, and if I can do it, anybody can. I think I suggested that last time, too.

Maryn, too lazy to go searching

wise_dec4u · Sep 25, 2008

Maryn said:
It's always smart, and courteous, to provide a link to the post you want to receive our attention, wise. If you're not sure how, I'd be glad to show you. I'm real low-tech, and if I can do it, anybody can. I think I suggested that last time, too.

Maryn, too lazy to go searching

Please, I would definitely like to know how to do this. Thanks for the tip and thanks for your crit on my work.

ELMontague · Sep 25, 2008

Go to your thread on SYW, copy the address from the address line. Then paste it in the comment on the thread on this board announcing it.

http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=116879

That one is for this thread, so it would just pop a second instance of this one in another window.

wise_dec4u · Sep 26, 2008

ELMontague said:
Go to your thread on SYW, copy the address from the address line. Then paste it in the comment on the thread on this board announcing it.

http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=116879

That one is for this thread, so it would just pop a second instance of this one in another window.

Thanks so much. Now I can put a link to my work.

Posted Revised Erotic Scene - Need Crits

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ELMontague

Maryn

I Tried

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