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wise_dec4u
09-25-2008, 01:40 AM
Based on the response I got a posted more revisions to my erotic (blow job) scene. It very emotional charged with a plot. I would like your opinions on whether this scene has the right balance of emotion and eroticism, is it realistic. Your constructive comments are greatly appreciated.

See link below:

http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=112525
ELMontague
09-25-2008, 04:46 AM
Did I miss this in SYW? I saw the old one, but didn't see a new posting. Maybe I missed it.
Maryn
09-25-2008, 05:08 PM
It's always smart, and courteous, to provide a link to the post you want to receive our attention, wise. If you're not sure how, I'd be glad to show you. I'm real low-tech, and if I can do it, anybody can. I think I suggested that last time, too.

Maryn, too lazy to go searching
wise_dec4u
09-25-2008, 05:32 PM
It's always smart, and courteous, to provide a link to the post you want to receive our attention, wise. If you're not sure how, I'd be glad to show you. I'm real low-tech, and if I can do it, anybody can. I think I suggested that last time, too.

Maryn, too lazy to go searching

Please, I would definitely like to know how to do this. Thanks for the tip and thanks for your crit on my work.
ELMontague
09-26-2008, 03:34 AM
Go to your thread on SYW, copy the address from the address line. Then paste it in the comment on the thread on this board announcing it.

http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=116879

That one is for this thread, so it would just pop a second instance of this one in another window.
wise_dec4u
09-26-2008, 05:47 PM
Go to your thread on SYW, copy the address from the address line. Then paste it in the comment on the thread on this board announcing it.

http://www.absolutewrite.com/forums/showthread.php?t=116879

That one is for this thread, so it would just pop a second instance of this one in another window.


Thanks so much. Now I can put a link to my work.