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I have my MC freak out a bit in the beginning of my story over the death of the local homeless guy. Part of it is because the homeless guy was a bit of a mascot where my MCs work but the main reason my MC freaks is because there's a lot of similarities between the HG's death and the death of his roommate years before.
Then later, the same MC is relatively calm when dealing with a young woman who has just wandered into the bar where he works. She's blood splattered and in shock as she's just murdered her boyfriend (due to supernatural reasons as this is an urban fantasy, and which are explained later).
Would the MC's initial reaction to the HG's death a bit over the top? I don't think the death itself was the main reason why he freaked as he did although he did witness the HG's death. I think the similarities were what really pushed him over the edge a bit. But this first scene sort of gets the ball rolling and is where he tells the other MC his big "secret" - that he's a mage.
Or is his calmness in dealing the later situation too strange given his earlier reaction?
Then later, the same MC is relatively calm when dealing with a young woman who has just wandered into the bar where he works. She's blood splattered and in shock as she's just murdered her boyfriend (due to supernatural reasons as this is an urban fantasy, and which are explained later).
Would the MC's initial reaction to the HG's death a bit over the top? I don't think the death itself was the main reason why he freaked as he did although he did witness the HG's death. I think the similarities were what really pushed him over the edge a bit. But this first scene sort of gets the ball rolling and is where he tells the other MC his big "secret" - that he's a mage.
Or is his calmness in dealing the later situation too strange given his earlier reaction?