HI, regarding sexual content

If you're asking if that is too much for erotica, the answer is no. It's hard to tell from just a paragraph, but if the whole work was in that same tone it probably wouldn't even qualify as erotica, more like a steamy romance.

I second AlleyCat, this falls short of the erotica threshold but might make for a steamy romance.

I'd also suggest a rewrite removing adverbs and finding stronger verbs which place me more firmly within the character's experience.

When I'm with a man, I don't think in words like ecstasy or sweet pleasure. I might use such words in a retelling to myself, but during the activity my vocabulary is less literary and my style less lyrical.

So if what you want to write is erotica, try being more earthy and literal. You don't have to be crude, but you do have to be more specific and more graphic.

I'd direct you to Share Your Work-Erotica for examples by many AWers, but you're underage.

Maryn, pleased to meet you and hoping this helps

Hi Celeste! In regard to your question it depends on what genre you're writing in. If it's erotica then what you've written is not too much at all but if you were writing a YA book then it might be a bit close to the mark?

As noted by the others, too much for who?

Heehee, this board has a policy about people under 18 (or is it 21) reading erotic content, but what is its policy about underage people writing and posting it?

MargueriteMing said:

Heehee, this board has a policy about people under 18 (or is it 21) reading erotic content, but what is its policy about underage people writing and posting it?

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LOL good point!

All ages can read and post here on the board about writing erotica. The Share Your Work Erotica board is adults-only.

Maryn, who just squeaked by (ha!)