I have an old script that I wrote a few years back, it's the last installment in a three- part, though the next two parts are prequels. Dare I say, it's a vampire story. I know, I know.. those are so 1998. Humor me, please.
I have multiple problems with this story, and several times, I've retired it. I just keep going back to it, hoping that there's some chance to salvage it. So much work and planning went into it, as the three stories together are so closely woven in their premise and backstory, and I'm having a hard time just shelving it and moving on.
I think a lot of the problem came from the re-writes. It seemed like the more I re-wrote, the more sloppy things got. I would fill a plot hole, and then end up with another, so I'd fill it, only to be left with another gap. I've felt like there were too many characters, too much emphasis on the wrong characters, and some characters even lost their personality as a whole because of the re-writes.
One thing that would greatly help me is to have someone read it and help me pick it apart. I can't critique myself, no one can, and therefore, I need an outside opinion. Someone who doesn't care to read a script that is far too long (149 pages... yeah, I know. Very bad.), someone who can give me good advice on what works and what doesn't, and someone who isn't just going to say "well it's a big ole pile of poo, throw it away". If it's not worth salvaging, I want to know, but if at all possible, I would like to make this script better. I'm just at a point where I don't think I can do it without some help.
Would anyone care to help me?
I have multiple problems with this story, and several times, I've retired it. I just keep going back to it, hoping that there's some chance to salvage it. So much work and planning went into it, as the three stories together are so closely woven in their premise and backstory, and I'm having a hard time just shelving it and moving on.
I think a lot of the problem came from the re-writes. It seemed like the more I re-wrote, the more sloppy things got. I would fill a plot hole, and then end up with another, so I'd fill it, only to be left with another gap. I've felt like there were too many characters, too much emphasis on the wrong characters, and some characters even lost their personality as a whole because of the re-writes.
One thing that would greatly help me is to have someone read it and help me pick it apart. I can't critique myself, no one can, and therefore, I need an outside opinion. Someone who doesn't care to read a script that is far too long (149 pages... yeah, I know. Very bad.), someone who can give me good advice on what works and what doesn't, and someone who isn't just going to say "well it's a big ole pile of poo, throw it away". If it's not worth salvaging, I want to know, but if at all possible, I would like to make this script better. I'm just at a point where I don't think I can do it without some help.
Would anyone care to help me?
