Closing her bible, Joan looked up at the road and then several upcoming streets where she saw a haze of headlights turning onto the same road they were on.
This sentence to me looks like it needs help but I don't know how to fix it. The repetition of 'road' bugs me and then the parts . . . 'where she saw' 'turning on to' 'they were on' just seems terribly worded. It just doesn't sound as good as I could hope for it to. Anyway suggestions on how to make it better?
This sentence to me looks like it needs help but I don't know how to fix it. The repetition of 'road' bugs me and then the parts . . . 'where she saw' 'turning on to' 'they were on' just seems terribly worded. It just doesn't sound as good as I could hope for it to. Anyway suggestions on how to make it better?