I am writing a sports themed suspense novel. The main character has a girlfriend, who is a well known sit-com actress. These two are constantly in bed together, taking any and all opportunities to have a bit of gratuitous fun.
I don't want these scenes to be either pornographic, or overly romantic, but I do want the reader to feel effected by them, just as I would want the reader to be effected by the other writing.
It is not always perfect either. In a sense the problems in their plot line intensify, they effect the male's performance and as his libido goes down, she gets bored with him as well. On the other hand, as the sports related thread gets closer to the "big game," the opposite occurs. So, what I have is someone who waffles.
The sit-com actress is also in the midst of planning and negotiating for a new show, so she is in the same frying pan (or waffle iron). The couple can't seem to get on the same page, so what I have are a series of indifferent, combative, awkward sex scenes, which are written in mechanical terms, and often have the old nose-bumping, hit the girlfriend accidentally with an elbow type scenarios, as well as bad manners like falling asleep during the act, not being able to "last," and so on.
It's become so fun showing their ineptitude, that their sex life has become a kind of comedy of errors.
My main question is: under these circumstances, how graphic do you think I should get? I am thinking of going over into Norman Mailer territory with this one, not romance novels.
I don't want these scenes to be either pornographic, or overly romantic, but I do want the reader to feel effected by them, just as I would want the reader to be effected by the other writing.
It is not always perfect either. In a sense the problems in their plot line intensify, they effect the male's performance and as his libido goes down, she gets bored with him as well. On the other hand, as the sports related thread gets closer to the "big game," the opposite occurs. So, what I have is someone who waffles.
The sit-com actress is also in the midst of planning and negotiating for a new show, so she is in the same frying pan (or waffle iron). The couple can't seem to get on the same page, so what I have are a series of indifferent, combative, awkward sex scenes, which are written in mechanical terms, and often have the old nose-bumping, hit the girlfriend accidentally with an elbow type scenarios, as well as bad manners like falling asleep during the act, not being able to "last," and so on.
It's become so fun showing their ineptitude, that their sex life has become a kind of comedy of errors.
My main question is: under these circumstances, how graphic do you think I should get? I am thinking of going over into Norman Mailer territory with this one, not romance novels.
