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Well, make that one Full is still out there. I finally got my rejection from Writer's House. One linme confused me though.
"This is a unique concept and we found Annabelle and Roland to be
interesting, relatable characters. That said, we're concerned that the
narrative comes across as a bit unnatural at times. It is with this in
mind that I'm afraid we're going to have to pass. Ultimately, after
careful consideration, Mr. X just wasn't as enthusiastic about this
manuscript as he needs to be in order to take on a new project. As you
know, these decisions are highly subjective, and another agent may have
a completely different opinion."
My very first beta wanted me to use contractions in the narative. He said it sounded "unnatural" without them. So this...
She couldn't understand.
instead of this...
She could not understand.
I did not listen becuase I always heard that was wrong. Maybe it's ok after all?
Maybe this is what they meant, too?
Anyone have an idea what "a bit unnatural" means?
Thanks.
"This is a unique concept and we found Annabelle and Roland to be
interesting, relatable characters. That said, we're concerned that the
narrative comes across as a bit unnatural at times. It is with this in
mind that I'm afraid we're going to have to pass. Ultimately, after
careful consideration, Mr. X just wasn't as enthusiastic about this
manuscript as he needs to be in order to take on a new project. As you
know, these decisions are highly subjective, and another agent may have
a completely different opinion."
My very first beta wanted me to use contractions in the narative. He said it sounded "unnatural" without them. So this...
She couldn't understand.
instead of this...
She could not understand.
I did not listen becuase I always heard that was wrong. Maybe it's ok after all?
Maybe this is what they meant, too?
Anyone have an idea what "a bit unnatural" means?
Thanks.