Hi, all! This is how my novel is going to start. I appreciate your comments!
Did you know that there is only one Stop sign in the busy streets of Paris?
However, there are around 7000 cafes in the City of Light. People don’t sit in the cafes for only a coffee, or tea and some pastry; they sit outside for hours and watch life and there is nothing more French than this.
Hi! Vida here!
Been a while since I've done this kind of thing, so, bear with me okay?
Ahem...
Did you know that there is only one Stop sign in the busy streets of Paris?
Not anymore, actually, but real life facts hardly matters in novels anyway. Aside from that, this is a pretty intriguing delivery, as in like, it makes me as a reader curious of what this will have to do with the story, but not THAT much intriguing. So for the first sentence hook... Kind of a success?
However, there are around 7000 cafes in the City of Light.
The use of the word 'however' seems to imply that there is contradicting connection between stop signs and cafe. I... I honestly have no idea what the connection between cafe and stop signs are so... Yeah, so, this second sentence doesn't support the first one unfortunately, at least, to me personally.
People don’t sit in the cafes for only a coffee, or tea and some pastry; they sit outside for hours and watch life and there is nothing more French than this.
In here we get the hint that the narrator is a character in the story. Or at least, that's what I'm getting because there is a lot of characterization being put in this disembodied voice.
So anyway, final verdict, it's not bad. Here's an advice: There's too much setting and not many event or character in these sentence. Wouldn't it better to have you show the setting through the character's eyes, sprinkle in an event on what he or she or they or it is doing?
Anyway, that's all for me. I am no professional, so please don't take my words to hard and please don't take it too seriously. If you disagree with something, then feel free to ignore it. You know more about your own story than I do after all.
And As Always, Thanks for Reading ^_^