I am vacillating between the first three sentences of my WIP.
A: No shit, there we were. It’s the way you're supposed to begin a war story. Except this one doesn’t begin over there, it begins here.
or
B: No shit, there we were. It's the way you're supposed to introduce a war story. Except this one doesn't start over there, it begins here.
I've read a bit how Gertrude Stein and others use repetition to show the significance of a particular word, but I'm curious if any of you have opinions or insights on this? Any advice on using option A or B for me would be appreciated, along with any other insights. Thank you.
FWIW, I am also debating between using "you're" or "we're" in each option.
A: No shit, there we were. It’s the way you're supposed to begin a war story. Except this one doesn’t begin over there, it begins here.
or
B: No shit, there we were. It's the way you're supposed to introduce a war story. Except this one doesn't start over there, it begins here.
I've read a bit how Gertrude Stein and others use repetition to show the significance of a particular word, but I'm curious if any of you have opinions or insights on this? Any advice on using option A or B for me would be appreciated, along with any other insights. Thank you.
FWIW, I am also debating between using "you're" or "we're" in each option.