I've been wrangling chapter 28 into a second draft, and it's a mess for a bunch of reasons. The story is pretty far along by chapter 28, only 6 more chapters to go.
It's alternating third person limited--that's the style I use.
But in this chapter I want to hint at something the viewpoint character (a man, in this case) doesn't know or see. So currently, I just zoom into omniscient for the last sentence and say something like-- Her smile pleased him, but what he didn't see was the knife behind her back.
It isn't that, but it's like that. This is the first and I think only instance in the entire WIP. Otherwise I obey the viewpoint rules.
What are your thoughts about popping an omniscient detail into the story like this?
Thanks for thoughts. There's a good chance this draft will need a complete overhaul anyway, so whatever you think is fine, I feel like throwing the thing into the trash heap anyway.
It's alternating third person limited--that's the style I use.
But in this chapter I want to hint at something the viewpoint character (a man, in this case) doesn't know or see. So currently, I just zoom into omniscient for the last sentence and say something like-- Her smile pleased him, but what he didn't see was the knife behind her back.
It isn't that, but it's like that. This is the first and I think only instance in the entire WIP. Otherwise I obey the viewpoint rules.
What are your thoughts about popping an omniscient detail into the story like this?
Thanks for thoughts. There's a good chance this draft will need a complete overhaul anyway, so whatever you think is fine, I feel like throwing the thing into the trash heap anyway.