Quote Originally Posted by johnalia View Post
Greetings and salutations!

I'm sure most of you have heard and answered this question at-least zillions of times but I would ask just to refresh your memories. I have been trying to write a film script based on a true politically motivated story. I have the story, alas! in mind and no matter how much I try, I'm always coming with boring, sluggish dialogues. I'm not sure if it is because I already know the story or what but it is annoying. Therefore, I would like to hear your suggestions/opinions for improvement. Above all if you know any short book/novel/script that might enlighten my thoughts would be greatly appreciated.

Best Regards,
John Alia

Think about your dialogue (every line) and how you can get it to do double or triple duty.

Every line, every scene, needs to move the plot forward. So if you have one scene where (I have no idea what your story is, just making something up randomly) a reporter talks to a source and gets important info, you may have the reporter just ask a question and the source say, 'the politician did this!' That's probably, as you suggest, boring.

Think about why you're having that source tell the reporter (why isn't the reporter finding it out on her own, or asking other people, and going to the politician, or six other things -- and remember you're not talking about a documentary, you can change or invent what you want even if it's based on a real thing.

Then, even if you decide the reporter needs to talk to that source, you can add in characterization (is the source reluctant, are they worried about something, are they eager to spill the details to get revenge, what's driving that?) and subplots (what is the reporter doing? How did they find the source? Does the reporter always go track down sources, or usually do research in a library? Are they used to talking harshly to politicians and has to change the approach to a source? Does the source remind them of someone or something?) or b-plots or other things.

Think about the point, the people, the backstory -- you can put all of that into a single line or two of dialogue. Instead of, '"Did you see PM Bob have sexual relations with the sheep?" you can say "I know you lived on a farm; I always do my research before I talk to someone -- your best friend your whole childhood was a sheep named Francisco. How could you stand by and watch Bob defile that innocent, wooly little girl?" <---ridiculous, on the fly.