Hello! As the title says I'm seeking a beta-reader for my historical fiction piece on the suffragists.
I'm mainly looking for someone to go over the overall story, development, plot, characters, etc. I also struggle with commas, so someone who could help me with that would be a plus.
I'm hoping to start submitting this piece to agents starting in the summer.
Here is my query letter for the MS. PM me if you're interested!
Cecilia Evans will do whatever it takes to get the vote for women’s rights. She scandalizes all of society by protesting in front of the White House and endures the feeding tube while on a hunger strike for suffrage. When she learns Tennessee, her home, will be the last state needed to ratify the Nineteenth Amendment, she hops on a train with a basket of roses and steams towards Nashville. She aims to pin a yellow rose, a symbol to pledge support for the vote, on every state senator she comes across.
She hasn’t stepped foot in the city’s stifling parlors since that disastrous night in the backseat of a “gentleman’s” motorcar. Hopefully, the church ladies won’t discover she was with the son of the city’s top anti-suffragist. Their whispering doesn’t deter her from navigating through Nashville’s den of Bible-thumpers, whiskey lobbyists, and klansmen. Cecilia appeals to the state’s top senators by asking them to honor the sacrifice thousands of women made during the Great War. Soon she runs out of roses and takes a position with the League of Women’s Voters to keep the crusade going.
Then the anti-suffragists print an article exposing Cecilia’s affair. When word gets out, senators who had pledged their support go back on their word. The head suffragists demand Cecilia return to Washington. With the vote days away, Cecilia must decide if she’ll retreat to save her reputation and job or confront the malicious gossip to ensure ratification.
I'm mainly looking for someone to go over the overall story, development, plot, characters, etc. I also struggle with commas, so someone who could help me with that would be a plus.
I'm hoping to start submitting this piece to agents starting in the summer.
Here is my query letter for the MS. PM me if you're interested!
Cecilia Evans will do whatever it takes to get the vote for women’s rights. She scandalizes all of society by protesting in front of the White House and endures the feeding tube while on a hunger strike for suffrage. When she learns Tennessee, her home, will be the last state needed to ratify the Nineteenth Amendment, she hops on a train with a basket of roses and steams towards Nashville. She aims to pin a yellow rose, a symbol to pledge support for the vote, on every state senator she comes across.
She hasn’t stepped foot in the city’s stifling parlors since that disastrous night in the backseat of a “gentleman’s” motorcar. Hopefully, the church ladies won’t discover she was with the son of the city’s top anti-suffragist. Their whispering doesn’t deter her from navigating through Nashville’s den of Bible-thumpers, whiskey lobbyists, and klansmen. Cecilia appeals to the state’s top senators by asking them to honor the sacrifice thousands of women made during the Great War. Soon she runs out of roses and takes a position with the League of Women’s Voters to keep the crusade going.
Then the anti-suffragists print an article exposing Cecilia’s affair. When word gets out, senators who had pledged their support go back on their word. The head suffragists demand Cecilia return to Washington. With the vote days away, Cecilia must decide if she’ll retreat to save her reputation and job or confront the malicious gossip to ensure ratification.
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