Firstly, hello.
I debated here or SYW, and decided here would be best since I'd like to work with a consistent someone (or someones).
Title says it all, project is not nearly complete. I had to stop because the colloquial speech of the first act is inconsistent with the progress of the second. I'd overhaul it all myself, but... I need a 'sense-check'. There's a specific ratio of nonsense-to-understanding that I need to achieve and maintain.
Ideally, 60:40 - 60% do not care, do not get, frustrationbait; 40% yeah, ok, I get these words.
Now, this WIP - is NOT for sensitive people, or ones who prefer being PC. It takes place in itsown sci-fantasy universe, and it strictly sticks to it. It is entirely possible to come into this with present day PC/real world flavor, and end up triggered. If you'd like more details on that, please PM me.
If it turns out you're pretty alright with my literary shenanigans and want to be on board with the development of this project, I would especially appreciate a chapter exchange with some motivational banter.
But, for the duration of our interactions, I'm offering feedback on a WIP of yours, so long as it's of the same primary genres (SF/F), and presentable/up to snuff.
I am NOT beta reading.
Thank you!
~ Shiro
I debated here or SYW, and decided here would be best since I'd like to work with a consistent someone (or someones).
Title says it all, project is not nearly complete. I had to stop because the colloquial speech of the first act is inconsistent with the progress of the second. I'd overhaul it all myself, but... I need a 'sense-check'. There's a specific ratio of nonsense-to-understanding that I need to achieve and maintain.
Ideally, 60:40 - 60% do not care, do not get, frustrationbait; 40% yeah, ok, I get these words.
Now, this WIP - is NOT for sensitive people, or ones who prefer being PC. It takes place in itsown sci-fantasy universe, and it strictly sticks to it. It is entirely possible to come into this with present day PC/real world flavor, and end up triggered. If you'd like more details on that, please PM me.
If it turns out you're pretty alright with my literary shenanigans and want to be on board with the development of this project, I would especially appreciate a chapter exchange with some motivational banter.
But, for the duration of our interactions, I'm offering feedback on a WIP of yours, so long as it's of the same primary genres (SF/F), and presentable/up to snuff.
I am NOT beta reading.
Thank you!
~ Shiro