I'm thinking about overwriting and craft. I like to leave emotions up to the events and reader interpretations. Too much character commentary gets in the way of reader engagement in my opinion. However, some critters and beta readers have asked for more explicit expressions of character feelings, reactions, and thoughts. I've used my time on AW to improve those facets of my writing. However, I just received a strongly worded rejection from an agent who had requested my full manuscript on the basis of work I did before discovering AW. His critique was that the revised manuscript displayed too much overwriting--basically, my emotional commentary was over the top for him, along with redundant descriptions. So now I'm looking for a way to integrate emotional content without being too on-the-nose about the emotional life of characters.
Anyone else have the experience of improving one facet of craft only to compromise another? I need to get back to the place where writing is fluid and spontaneous again without losing the new skills that came from being hyper-conscious of how I was writing.
Related: general strategies for getting readers to connect with a character's thoughts/inner life without giving frequent access to the character's thoughts?
For what it's worth, the agent was assessing my manuscript on the basis of military sci fi, which is only part of what I'm writing. The mss is genre fluid, I guess.
Anyone else have the experience of improving one facet of craft only to compromise another? I need to get back to the place where writing is fluid and spontaneous again without losing the new skills that came from being hyper-conscious of how I was writing.
Related: general strategies for getting readers to connect with a character's thoughts/inner life without giving frequent access to the character's thoughts?
For what it's worth, the agent was assessing my manuscript on the basis of military sci fi, which is only part of what I'm writing. The mss is genre fluid, I guess.