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Thread: Too many "her"s!!!

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    Too many "her"s!!!

    How could this be better phrased? There are four 'her's in that one sentence. Also, too many words beginning with the letter 'h'.

    He grabbed her head by the hair on the back of her head and berated her, inches from her face.
    Thanks in advance!
    Last edited by Auteur; 07-06-2019 at 02:30 AM.

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