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Thread: Help with a minor point of grammar

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    Where have the last ten years gone? Bufty's Avatar
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    Not what you asked, but why is he walking across the room to these boxes?

    Is it possible to focus instead on his purpose or intent upon reaching the boxes? 'Walking across' is pretty mundane - no?

    And depending upon context, unpacked could be interpreted to mean not yet unpacked. Empty is clearer.
    Last edited by Bufty; 06-13-2019 at 12:36 PM.
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