Hi Raven2Delta,

This is not the section to ask for critique, I imagine a mod will come to close this thread in a bit.

You need to have 50 posts to create a thread in the Share Your Work section. I would familiarise yourself to what is required and the format and info to provide when requesting a critique. If you give others feedback you will soon have 50 posts and able to post an extract yourself.

I hope this helps.