Hi everyone,
I'm currently working on the second draft of a novel (my second novel-length story but the first that I've got this far with). It is technically a dystopia, but it's initially quite a subtle one, barring one single fact. That fact has a lot of implications on everyday life, and I reference them in the flow of the text whenever it feels appropriate. However, since I'm writing from a first person POV I'm finding it quite difficult to put this in without it looking laboured. Most of these implications are supposed to be things that she takes utterly for granted and would be unlikely to really 'notice'.
I'm trying to get around this by having her refer to things in a familiar, known way, with lots of things communicated indirectly via implication. I'm also toying with using a few flashback scenes, when a memory might naturally be triggered. But I do feel that the overall story is currently missing the 'how it got to be this way' overall picture which would help make sense of all of the different implications and why they fit together - as opposed to reading like a collection of disconnected changes.
As an example, the climate is much hotter. Sea levels have risen and people are living on much smaller pockets of land. I'm referencing how the main characters experience the temperature and trying to use it to demonstrate their characters (i.e. one is very uncomfortable but keeps it to herself, vs one who constantly complains, etc); and the changes to how they get around (lots more boats and bridges). But as it reads at the moment, it could just be summer; it could be that they happen to live on an imaginary collection of islands. I'm not sure how to be clearer that this is a changed world, without making the main character very explicit about it, which I don't think she would 'think' to do.
Any advice or tips?
I'm currently working on the second draft of a novel (my second novel-length story but the first that I've got this far with). It is technically a dystopia, but it's initially quite a subtle one, barring one single fact. That fact has a lot of implications on everyday life, and I reference them in the flow of the text whenever it feels appropriate. However, since I'm writing from a first person POV I'm finding it quite difficult to put this in without it looking laboured. Most of these implications are supposed to be things that she takes utterly for granted and would be unlikely to really 'notice'.
I'm trying to get around this by having her refer to things in a familiar, known way, with lots of things communicated indirectly via implication. I'm also toying with using a few flashback scenes, when a memory might naturally be triggered. But I do feel that the overall story is currently missing the 'how it got to be this way' overall picture which would help make sense of all of the different implications and why they fit together - as opposed to reading like a collection of disconnected changes.
As an example, the climate is much hotter. Sea levels have risen and people are living on much smaller pockets of land. I'm referencing how the main characters experience the temperature and trying to use it to demonstrate their characters (i.e. one is very uncomfortable but keeps it to herself, vs one who constantly complains, etc); and the changes to how they get around (lots more boats and bridges). But as it reads at the moment, it could just be summer; it could be that they happen to live on an imaginary collection of islands. I'm not sure how to be clearer that this is a changed world, without making the main character very explicit about it, which I don't think she would 'think' to do.
Any advice or tips?