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Not sure if this is trivial or not but I've encountered it more than once so I thought I'd ask for advice.
One example was my group is exploring a huge warehouse that's full of cardboard boxes. The boxes are eight feet tall and are stacked so that they're in sort of a maze, like a hedge maze. In the center of this warehouse is an open area full of conveyor belts and other machinery. I had a hard time saying that "they moved from maze of boxes into the open area", it just didn't seem right. If I assume my reader remembers they are in the boxes I could say "the moved into the open area." Each way I tried it seemed awkward.
Another was the group moving across a city. "They walked down a highway. They climbed down the berm and walked through a residential area. They saw the warehouse ahead and walked to that." Seems awkward too.
Yet another was were my protagonist was in the hall and I had to move her to the bedroom. "She entered the bedroom." Again, it seems awkward. "She moved to the bedroom." doesn't sound right either.
Any suggestions? Am I making too big a deal out of it?
One example was my group is exploring a huge warehouse that's full of cardboard boxes. The boxes are eight feet tall and are stacked so that they're in sort of a maze, like a hedge maze. In the center of this warehouse is an open area full of conveyor belts and other machinery. I had a hard time saying that "they moved from maze of boxes into the open area", it just didn't seem right. If I assume my reader remembers they are in the boxes I could say "the moved into the open area." Each way I tried it seemed awkward.
Another was the group moving across a city. "They walked down a highway. They climbed down the berm and walked through a residential area. They saw the warehouse ahead and walked to that." Seems awkward too.
Yet another was were my protagonist was in the hall and I had to move her to the bedroom. "She entered the bedroom." Again, it seems awkward. "She moved to the bedroom." doesn't sound right either.
Any suggestions? Am I making too big a deal out of it?