For the longest time, I have been under the impression that, in today's publishing world, it's considered a no-no to have dialogue, followed by a beat, followed by another piece of dialogue, followed by a final beat (or followed by a final piece of dialogue)--in the same paragraph by a single character.
I have, however, occasionally done it, as shown in my writing below.
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“You know.” The pastor smiled through pinched lips. “There’s a wonderful quote from Martin Luther. I think about it whenever I look at my wife. ‘Men have broad and large chests and narrow hips.’” Lozano’s chest swelled.
[Reaction from protagonist.]
Pastor Lozano continued. “‘And more understanding than women, who have but small and narrow breast, and broad hips, to the end they should remain at home, sit still, keep house, and bear and bring up children.’” Lozano touched his gold wedding band. “My wonderful wife has gifted me with a loving home and two beautiful children.”
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I would appreciate any comments and/or suggestions on, not how to edit this, but whether publishers accept this beat/dialogue presentation.
Thank you in advance.
I have, however, occasionally done it, as shown in my writing below.
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“You know.” The pastor smiled through pinched lips. “There’s a wonderful quote from Martin Luther. I think about it whenever I look at my wife. ‘Men have broad and large chests and narrow hips.’” Lozano’s chest swelled.
[Reaction from protagonist.]
Pastor Lozano continued. “‘And more understanding than women, who have but small and narrow breast, and broad hips, to the end they should remain at home, sit still, keep house, and bear and bring up children.’” Lozano touched his gold wedding band. “My wonderful wife has gifted me with a loving home and two beautiful children.”
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I would appreciate any comments and/or suggestions on, not how to edit this, but whether publishers accept this beat/dialogue presentation.
Thank you in advance.