I am in desperate need for some Beta's who will actually return work!
I've done several read through's myself and usually like to have a few friends or family be my first round of beta's. Unfortunately it seems everyone is too busy this time around. I've had 13 people agree to read since JAN!!! and not a single person has given me any feedback accept a bunch of verbal "omg I love it" :/
Please help a desperate author! Willing to swap or sell kidney to get some feedback. Looking for all forms, general beta, critique, tear it apart, whatever.
Rough first attempt at a blurb (don't judge)-
Media attention has haunted Robin's life. Growing up in a small town with the only thing people knowing about you being lies tore her childhood apart. All she wanted to do was be forgotten. When Caleb Woods, the Lead singer of the Rock band Reverberation sets his eyes on Robin she's terrified of the media attention. Caleb, who hides a dark past of his own has to help Robin overcome her fear in order to find love and redemption.
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[FONT="]There it was again, the look. It was black. It was red. It was hotter than stepping on white hot beach sand barefoot on a summer afternoon. It made me two parts giddy, and one part envious. [FONT="]“He can’t keep his eyes off of you.” I leaned over to shout at Annie. Tonight I was playing wing woman although there wasn’t much to do except watch him undress her with those ridiculous blue eyes. Every eye in the house was fixated on him and he was fixated on the woman to my left. “I feel like his stare would burn a hole through me to get to you!” [/FONT][FONT="]There was no need to attempt to keep my voice down. I’d be lucky if she heard half of the words I screamed to her since she insisted we position ourselves directly in front of the amplifier. Considering the stage was low enough to not even come to my hip, the mammoth thudding speaker was perfectly even with my head. Booms from the bass tuned to maximum mixed with an electric whine of rock music and shot straight into my eardrums. Or, I should say former eardrums. I was certain they were bleeding from the noise right now. Surly I’d suffer irreversible damage after tonight. The songs were super catchy though so I couldn’t help but hop around and dance with the beat. Annie called what I did flailing around like a fish on dry land, but whatever. [/FONT][FONT="]
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I've done several read through's myself and usually like to have a few friends or family be my first round of beta's. Unfortunately it seems everyone is too busy this time around. I've had 13 people agree to read since JAN!!! and not a single person has given me any feedback accept a bunch of verbal "omg I love it" :/
Please help a desperate author! Willing to swap or sell kidney to get some feedback. Looking for all forms, general beta, critique, tear it apart, whatever.
Rough first attempt at a blurb (don't judge)-
Media attention has haunted Robin's life. Growing up in a small town with the only thing people knowing about you being lies tore her childhood apart. All she wanted to do was be forgotten. When Caleb Woods, the Lead singer of the Rock band Reverberation sets his eyes on Robin she's terrified of the media attention. Caleb, who hides a dark past of his own has to help Robin overcome her fear in order to find love and redemption.
Opening lines -
[FONT="]There it was again, the look. It was black. It was red. It was hotter than stepping on white hot beach sand barefoot on a summer afternoon. It made me two parts giddy, and one part envious. [FONT="]“He can’t keep his eyes off of you.” I leaned over to shout at Annie. Tonight I was playing wing woman although there wasn’t much to do except watch him undress her with those ridiculous blue eyes. Every eye in the house was fixated on him and he was fixated on the woman to my left. “I feel like his stare would burn a hole through me to get to you!” [/FONT][FONT="]There was no need to attempt to keep my voice down. I’d be lucky if she heard half of the words I screamed to her since she insisted we position ourselves directly in front of the amplifier. Considering the stage was low enough to not even come to my hip, the mammoth thudding speaker was perfectly even with my head. Booms from the bass tuned to maximum mixed with an electric whine of rock music and shot straight into my eardrums. Or, I should say former eardrums. I was certain they were bleeding from the noise right now. Surly I’d suffer irreversible damage after tonight. The songs were super catchy though so I couldn’t help but hop around and dance with the beat. Annie called what I did flailing around like a fish on dry land, but whatever. [/FONT][FONT="]
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