Buoyancy

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When Is It Dark Enough?
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sunlight captures a live oak branch
beneath a grackle's squall

darting across the walking path
a delinquent cardinal
frantically pursues red

evil is always complicated
like blind-drawing circles

but when our eyes are not onions
we can see infant light

we can praise
our purgatory existence
glean fields for what's left behind

walk before dawn and choose
to let the sunrise surprise us
 
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Nice! I'll read a few more times and see if anything else pops out at me needing addressing, Terry. For now, look at your syllable counts in the second stanza, second line and in the 5th stanza, first line. It messes with the rhythm of your poem a little.