Dialogue Tag help

Bajungadustin · Aug 15, 2018

looking for a good way to write someone who didnt interrupt someone but scolded someone for being rude.

"Scolded" doesnt feel right and neither does "hissed" or "interrupted"

"You know David," said Shawn, "Your uncle here, he's got himself a big heart, but he's a terrible cook."

"Shawn!" Paul interrupted,"Shut up, you are being rude!"

any input would be great. I know my puncuation is probably off here too.

DanielSTJ · Aug 15, 2018

Snapped maybe?

Also, maybe hissed?

cornflake · Aug 15, 2018

Said.

rosegold · Aug 15, 2018

I think the sentence makes the scolding clear enough. You can get away with a simple "said."

JohnLine · Aug 15, 2018

"Scolded" feels perfectly fine to me. I use "interjected" a lot; although, that's to indicate that they hadn't been speaking before.
Other possible words are "scoffed", "chided", "lashed", and "lambasted".

blacbird · Aug 15, 2018

rosegold said:
I think the sentence makes the scolding clear enough. You can get away with a simple "said."

Agree. Point being that it is always better if the dialog itself carries the meaning and intensity, and it is nearly always possible to make that happen.

caw

Ari Meermans · Aug 15, 2018

^ Another vote for "said". Same reason as blacbird's.

Dialogue Tag help

Bajungadustin

DanielSTJ

The Wandering Bard

cornflake

practical experience, FTW

rosegold

JohnLine

Owns a pen.

blacbird

Ari Meermans

MacAllister's Official Minion & Greeter