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I'm looking at someone's markup on a piece I ran through a writer's group. This person, and only this person, has marked several cases where I used 'X was verbing' and suggested replacing with 'X verbed'. Example:
Mine: "Mama, hurry up!" Small Burrower was literally vibrating with impatience, bouncing slightly as he stood in the aisle...
His: ...Small Burrower literally vibrated with impatience...
I'm not sure what the difference is, if there is one? My vague idea is that I'm using 'was verbing' in describing the state of the person or thing in the moment.
Mine: "Mama, hurry up!" Small Burrower was literally vibrating with impatience, bouncing slightly as he stood in the aisle...
His: ...Small Burrower literally vibrated with impatience...
I'm not sure what the difference is, if there is one? My vague idea is that I'm using 'was verbing' in describing the state of the person or thing in the moment.