I've been called out for having too many "ands" (or other conjunctions) in a single sentence. I know sentences can be overlong and wordy, but is there a good rule of thumb for not overdoing it?
eg: He went to the store and saw that there were some things on sale he really would like to buy, but sure enough, this was the one time he hadn't brought this wallet and wouldn't be able to purchase them, unless he was able to buy something with his phone, but he'd never done anything like that before and was afraid to try, so he just went back home to get his wallet.
eg: He went to the store and saw that there were some things on sale he really would like to buy, but sure enough, this was the one time he hadn't brought this wallet and wouldn't be able to purchase them, unless he was able to buy something with his phone, but he'd never done anything like that before and was afraid to try, so he just went back home to get his wallet.