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    Heat stroke

    Hey,

    I have a character who isn't sleeping well, and he is doing some manual labor on a hot roof, and as things stand now he passes out on the roof. Partly from the heat and partly from the lack of sleep. Someone finds him like that, helps him off the roof and they go inside to recover him.

    He's groggy, but comes around. I wan't trying to give him heat stroke, but maybe I did. According to google, I gave him heat exhaustion. For example, he is sweating hard.

    ^^ But. My critique circle said that he had an episode of heat stroke and that it would have more severe ramifications than what I wrote. (When I was writing I did not ever have the thought 'this is heat stroke' ... more the thought 'this kid isn't getting the sleep he needs and the roof is too damn hot.' )

    But maybe I gave him heat stroke without meaning to. I wonder if I should make the incident more mild. My goal is to have a twenty minute recovery inside be sensible.

    Heat exhaustion is usually accompanied by a fever no higher than 104 degrees Fahrenheit, excessive thirst, nausea, fainting, cool and clammy skin, weakness, muscle aches, heavy sweating, slow heartbeat and dizziness. Heatstroke may develop following heat exhaustion if the condition is not treated.
    https://www.childrenscolorado.org/co...tion-symptoms/

    From my research about the two conditions my writing on that part is fine as stands. He has heat exhaustion not stroke. I was really surprised that several people said I had an instance of heat stroke. I can't figure out what the detail was that tipped them to that conclusion. Maybe I should have the guy that rescues him call it out directly as heat exhaustion.

    Any thoughts about this?
    Last edited by Patty; 06-13-2018 at 07:47 PM.
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