I am writing in limited third, alternating between two protagonists.
Some people in real life dislike the direct italicized thoughts in my story. Others say those are fine. To my way of thinking, italicized thought is about as close as you can get to the PoV character as possible - you are definitely in their head and there is no (real) room for intentional lying. It's a neat trick. The thoughts are absolutely reliable. Yet, these critique partners dislike direct italicized thought. Popular authors seem to use italicized thought, so I think it's still a thing in fantasy/science fiction
I wonder how I should resolve this?
I definitely want to be consistent throughout my story - I could have very few such thoughts, only in certain types of situations, like emotionally fraught scenes.
I could bow to the critiques and convert them to indirect narrative.
(Patty wondered how to resolve this).
I could check with the people at AW. This might help me figure it out.
What are your thoughts on italicized direct thought?
Some people in real life dislike the direct italicized thoughts in my story. Others say those are fine. To my way of thinking, italicized thought is about as close as you can get to the PoV character as possible - you are definitely in their head and there is no (real) room for intentional lying. It's a neat trick. The thoughts are absolutely reliable. Yet, these critique partners dislike direct italicized thought. Popular authors seem to use italicized thought, so I think it's still a thing in fantasy/science fiction
I wonder how I should resolve this?
I definitely want to be consistent throughout my story - I could have very few such thoughts, only in certain types of situations, like emotionally fraught scenes.
I could bow to the critiques and convert them to indirect narrative.
(Patty wondered how to resolve this).
I could check with the people at AW. This might help me figure it out.
What are your thoughts on italicized direct thought?
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