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    To answer your question, ask yourself: can Sarah know that her smile is adoring? IMO, yes. OTOH, it might be better to show how Sarah knows that her smile is adoring (in this case, prolly by internal thoughts) rather than use the adverb. But you can, yes, because Sarah can feel the sensation of adoring the friend.

    Contrast with something like, " A smile lit up Sarah's face." Here there's a description of what's happening to Sarah's face that would need to be perceived by an external person. Sarah knows she's smiling and can feel the joy, but she can't know that her face is actually "lit up" by it.
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