I am currently reading a 1975 novel by Jeffrey Konvitz called The Sentinel. Konvitz seemed to enjoy a properly placed incomplete sentence (as I do). That's okay! But I came across one particular piece of writing that confused me. When I say "one particular piece," I only mean ten words. There were ten words at the end of a break in chapter twelve that bothered me. Here is the quoted text:
"Gradually, her eyes began to close. Soon she was asleep."
Am I the only one driven crazy about this? It's the exact same sentence structure back to back. In the first sentence he used the comma, and in the second sentence he negated the comma.
How can you write loose without disrupting the readability?
"Gradually, her eyes began to close. Soon she was asleep."
Am I the only one driven crazy about this? It's the exact same sentence structure back to back. In the first sentence he used the comma, and in the second sentence he negated the comma.
How can you write loose without disrupting the readability?
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