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This is kind of an odd one. I’m working on a piece that is third-person limited. I have a paragraph where the description stops because the POV character wants to readjust their mood, then redescribes the same scene. Here, I’ll just show an example:
Is that ellipsis being used correctly there? Would an em-dash be better? A simple period doesn’t seem right.
Thanks for any insight!
The valley cradled a mansion, the home of a lonely man—no, Jessica mustn’t let herself get sucked into his void. Today is for celebration…
The valley cradled a mansion, the home of William.
Is that ellipsis being used correctly there? Would an em-dash be better? A simple period doesn’t seem right.
Thanks for any insight!