I think I'm with everyone in saying the 1st is better, BUT...
I'm also with The Otter in saying that the 2nd looks to represent your story more in the way I think you'd want your audience to 'see' through your eyes.

If the 2nd were polished, cleaner, the like, I think I'd choose it myself.
I think I like the more direct than vague appearance of what you're trying to suggest to me, I dunno. XD