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Hi everyone. I'm new.
I had an idea for a picture book, and went ahead and wrote it down, which was a lot of fun, but the word count ended up at about 1800, which apparently is too long. Also, maybe the language is too...advanced? Here's the first bit:
Lots happens, there's good conflict, and Francis ends up happy in the end.
What say you? Is this doomed?
Also, if anyone would be interested in reading the whole thing and giving me feedback, I would so appreciate it.
This is an illustration I did for the book, which I know isn't really a thing you're supposed to do, but here it is, anyway. https://scontent-dft4-2.xx.fbcdn.ne...=18554ffd48b2c2b1f14a333af2cbcbe4&oe=59FD65C3
I had an idea for a picture book, and went ahead and wrote it down, which was a lot of fun, but the word count ended up at about 1800, which apparently is too long. Also, maybe the language is too...advanced? Here's the first bit:
Francis wallowed.
He felt the familiar ooze of slimy mud squishing between his long, elegant toes.
This was his life, the pond life, where he had hatched, where he had transitioned from his strange, fishy infancy to his current illustrious adult form. Francis was a tree frog: a creature of land, water, and air, a creature whose magnificently sticky foot pads could scale great heights, whose powerful hind legs could thrust his limber body high into the air, whose slick skin could glide through the water as smoothly as a catfish, whose stretchy cheeks could blast out air in a gorgeous call for attention.
He was better than this, he thought, as the humid air filled with the sound of crickets and his fellow frogs. He imagined a life of adventure, of glamour, a life that he could have, if only he was somewhere less…pond. Somewhere fabulous.
The lukewarm mud sucked listlessly at his soft, pale belly. A fly buzzed by. Francis’ lightning-fast tongue, the result of billions of years of perfect evolution, snatched it out of the air, and he found himself swallowing it compulsively. He wasn’t even hungry. He didn’t even like flies.
Lots happens, there's good conflict, and Francis ends up happy in the end.
What say you? Is this doomed?
Also, if anyone would be interested in reading the whole thing and giving me feedback, I would so appreciate it.
This is an illustration I did for the book, which I know isn't really a thing you're supposed to do, but here it is, anyway. https://scontent-dft4-2.xx.fbcdn.ne...=18554ffd48b2c2b1f14a333af2cbcbe4&oe=59FD65C3
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