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Yeah, so a guy loses his job, the bills are piling up, he's getting dressed and leaving the house at the same usual time every morning, heading out of the house to work, everyone believes. But instead he's out looking for a job. But he gets no offers, jsut a come'on from the.. sorry, he gets no offers. His priority is to find a job before he loses his house and his world falls apart, taking his loved ones down in the meantime. What kinds of thoughts are going through this guy's head? Why does he want to save his family? Maybe his father was irresponsible and the MC grew up in an unstable way, maybe he and his mother and siblings ended up in a shelter. Maybe he has deep psychological motivations that are tied to his feeling of self-worth and buried in his subconscious is an imperative, maybe ill-founded, that he be better than his father. Maybe his self worth is tied into being better than his father. Yeah, there are these inner motivations, but first he needs to save his family. I think you can do both, no?
Yes, of course. I never meant to say otherwise.
But a guy looking for a job to save his family isn't a story. Not until something changes. Is it?
But still, you're showing not telling. So we get it in his actions, in his dialogue, in his monologue,I'm honestly having trouble seeing what the confusion is. It's possible that it could just be eluding me, so I'll bow out, but I'm sure someone a lot smarter than I am will be able to help a lot more. I wish you the best.
I don't think it's a question of smartness. I think we are probably talking about different things and I'm not expressing myself well at all. Possibly because I'm confused myself. I definitely don't have an answer to anything.
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