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Dell stood at the front porch of Landy's house, sweat dotting his forehead after a long day's work.
Looks fine to me as well. I would only like to mention the visual positioning given the word choice. (In other words: What I see.) With, ‘Dell stood at the front porch of Landy's house…’, I imagine Dell standing at the entrance to the porch — as in: at the base of the step/s leading up to the porch, or somewhere close to it — but not on the porch.
Hope that's what/where you were aiming for, because I would frown somewhat if the next line was: And then Dell knocked on the door (as that would mean Dell has a very long arm, or that's a narrow porch!)
Dell stood at the front porch of Landy's house, sweat dotting his forehead after a long day's work.