Thunderclap Harrier
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Can you explain what's meant by the mention of slit nostrils placing the reader at arm's length? I think that you mean it creates some kind of break, and if so I would like to know more so that I can avoid it in the future.
Yes, the child is sweating oil and going through a molt. I'd like to take a visceral approach to describing the alien elements of the character. Any kind of advice that would let me accomplish this goal while maintaining a smooth narrative feel would be fantastic.
Thank you for your critique.
Yes, the child is sweating oil and going through a molt. I'd like to take a visceral approach to describing the alien elements of the character. Any kind of advice that would let me accomplish this goal while maintaining a smooth narrative feel would be fantastic.
Thank you for your critique.