Quote Originally Posted by dpaterso View Post
One of mine, title's Devil Inside

After his second round of knocks on the flaking door he heard clumping footsteps inside, and knew they heralded trouble. A bolt thumped and the door swung open. Flannagan looked up at the blotchy face of a surly young man whose eyes radiated hostility.


Knocking on a door is a great way to open - it's hard not to read on to see who opens.

I'm not sure how Flannagan knew the footsteps heralded trouble. Even though they are clumping. I think there could be some good sentences in detailing that.